1.-ship comes out of hyperspace, and we pan left to reveal : open space.
		JEFF
	"ummm." 
		ALAN
	"umm, I think the planet is over there" 

		JEFF
	"MY GOD THEY BLEW IT UP!" 

		ALAN
	"no, it is behind you, give me that" 

		JEFF
	"HEY! Don't touch my-" 

Ship turns around, towards camera, and heads to the right. 
we pan ahead to reveal the evil cloudy orange planet with at least 6 blue and green moons circling speedily.

2.-Camera pushes in on A&J in the cockpit, from the ship's nose 
*-(perhaps riff on how they can't see anything with all the steam? so we can just white out he windshield?).

		ALAN
	"You're doing it wrong."
		JEFF
	"This is MY shiP! Stop-"
		ALAN
	"Gimmie that-"
		JEFF
	"I WILL TEAR YOUR ARMS OFF"

.-("sir, there's an unidentified ship in sector 3" "just as i've forseen")

		ALAN
	"ok. say, it's stuffy in here."
		JEFF
	"I AM A WOOKIEE"
		ALAN
	"yeah. so how are we supposed to find their secret base?"

3.-FPS view, hands come into frame from all sides.

		JEFF
	"I AM THE CAPTAIN OF THIS SHIP"
		ALAN
	"how do you search a planet? I mean where do you start? How about there-"
		JEFF
	"the force will guide us, i'm sure. 

.-(shelley sits down and starts to warm up the gun? continuity probs?????)

		JEFF
	"stop. stop touching that.
		ALAN
	"i'm not touching that. wait-"
		JEFF
	"I'm sure it's right in front of us. let's land over there. I can do it. I can do it!"

.-("fire away!" "ohmigosh ohmigosh ohmigosh..." lackeys head to desks...)

4.-Alan and jeff grin widely at the camera as if they hadn't just been arguing.
All is silent, until...

		ALAN
	"We are so going to kick their asses."
		Jeff
	"Yeah-"
		ALAN
	"Yeah-"
		JEff
	"Nothing could possible go wrong-"
		ALAN
	Yeah. I am PSYCHED."
		JEFF
	"you BET!"
		Alan
	"Assuming ... we can find the fortress."
		JEFF
	"Let me drive!"

0.-("They're within range. Fire!" "sir, the targeting system isn't designed for such a small vessel, sir." "i said FIRE!". Shelley moves the nob.)

5.-we see the ship wrangle around on a targeting screen 
	CUT OUT??::::
	(or just incomprehensible cheap CG dots representing moon and ship?)
			CASE??(VO)
		How are we hearing them, ensign?
			Alex (VO)
		"Well, y'see. They, uh, left their intercom on, sir. heh heh"
	the ship bounces off a moon.
			CASE?? (VO)
 		(pause) Are they retarded jedi?
	::::END CUT

?.-(planet surface : wide panning side shot, the ultimate weapon warms up. steam shoots around.)

7. inside the ship's cramped cockpit
		ALAN
	If you don't let me work my pilot magic, we'll never
		JEFF
	I WILL TURN THIS SHIP AROUND
		ALAN
	You already did that, maestro

5.- we see the ship wrangle around on a targeting screen. Shelley presses a button.

		JEFF
	I AM A WOOKIEE!

.- (planet surface : a wide-calm side shot, the ultimate weapon fires)

9.-(ship jerks 180 degrees, just barely missing the ultimate weapon's blast. a moon wandering into the foreground is half demolished)

7. - Jeff and Alan scream like little girls

.- (Shelley pulls a lever.) 
.-(Ext.PlanetSurface :from worm's eye perspective, the ultimate weapon fires into the sky, and the screen turns white as the camera tracks into the gun's blast)

. - the screen fades from white to reveal Jeff and alan sit in the cockpit, completely unphased.

		ALAN
	they MISSED!
		JEFF
	No i doubt that's possible, i mean-

Alan is looking to their left.

		ALAN
	AHHHH! DV-X7!
		JEFF
	how could they possibly miss-

Alan shakes Jeff, and points. camera pulls back slightly to reveal the smoking husk of their droid's head.

		ALAN
	They got DV-X7!	

JEff screams, and alan soon follows

8.- (CU side shot, the ultimate weapon abrubtly fires)

10.- jeff and alan spin madly, eyes bugged out of their heads, screaming.

		JEFF
	WE'RE ALL GOING TO DIE!

		ALAN
	FIRE ALL MISSLES!

		JEFF
	WHAT?

		ALAN
	FIRE! FIRE NOW!

		JEFF
	AT WHAT?

		ALAN
	JUST FIRE! FIRE FIRE FIRE!

		JEFF
	AAAAHHHHHHH!

11.-(ship zooms wildly away from camera, but drops slats and comes about fire missiles wildly. Impressively, as if they might do some good. somehow.)

12.- (zoom down the ultimate weapon's barrel as it fires for the final time)

13.the front half of the ship is blown off 

14.-Camera pans down to the full bulk of the planet (seeing a tiny "smoking barrel" where fortress is?),
and the ruined ship flies, down past the camera - spinning sickly end-over-end 
*-(like the villians trapped in the forbidden zone at the beginning of Superman).
we hear tinny screaming from inside, that fades out as the ship shrinks into the atmosphere.

15.-(just like the shot of the probe droid landing in the snow, we pan down from the sky to see a speeding comet(wreckage) slam down into the country side. 
this is tied onto the front of the shot where jeff and alan emerge from the trees/wreckage. 
*-Assuming we can re-use the beginnings of some of that footage.)

.- Case speaks gibberish and strangles alex. (?too unexplained?)